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Wednesday, May 19, 2010

NAÏVE

FOR POW PROMPT 3

Something a little less mind bending this time.

It was the first fresh peach I had ever tasted.
I could hardly believe how delicious.
At twenty five I was dumbfounded afresh
By my ignorance of the simplest things.

From 'Fulbright Scholars' Birthday Letters by Ted Hughes.
Write a poem inspired by this quote. See you next Wednesday Banditos and remember Bob might not be your Uncle.


BOB

Mum’s sister’s live-in lover
Went by the name of Robert.
I used to call him ‘Uncle’
Until I was twenty five.


0h… THAT quote…


JACK

Reluctance to entertain
Ideas above his station
A tendency to abstain
From physical temptation
Discipline made him refrain
From seeking the sensation
Promise of punishment, pain
Subdued the fascination
Concepts designed to sustain
A teenager’s frustration

A brief encounter with Jane
Transformed the situation
She was the first to explain
To him; a revelation
An attitude of disdain
Replaced intimidation
He could no longer contain
The urge for celebration
Uncorking vintage Champagne
Completed Jack’s elation

12 comments:

  1. clever, clever -- with lots of tion and ain!

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  2. Thanks Angie; To gain your attention.

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  3. I just tried one using "verse" and "serve" sort of like that, but it turned out impossible to read. Your choice is much saner, aside from being fun. (though I wouldn't want to get my tongue tangled on that last bit)

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  4. Thanks Briarcat; That would be a sticky situation...

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  5. Phew, I don't know how you come up with these things! I hope sweet Jane was on the Jack 'n' Jill!

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  6. I am glad that Jane turned Jack on to vintage champagne..all work and no play makes Jack a dull boy..which he wasn't once he discovered
    Andy's Jack 'n' Jill

    PS
    I hope the Thailand situation quietens down soon and you are not affected by the incidents.

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  7. A good read, Stan and very entertaining!

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  8. Thanks to:
    Andy; He's just getting into the rhythm...
    Rallentanda; Jack's on the rock 'n' roll, but he still needs his playtime.
    I guess you've seen the news by now...
    Derrick; Jack's mum might argue with you on that.

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  9. Stan, do I detect you've been downloading more than a little hip-hop, with all of the ains and tions? Liked this and imagine it nicely delivered via spoken word.
    Also, just hosted 35 Thais here for some higher ed stuff & wish your beautiful country the peace and restoration you all deserve.

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  10. Thanks JDM; Here's hoping for a swift return to peace and harmony.

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  11. like the pace of this poem all the way to the end

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  12. Thanks One More Believer; Glad I could keep it up.

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