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Saturday, June 29, 2013

THE HANGOVER

For Sunday Whirl: Morning, Bend, Bear, Unstable, Wild, Retreat, Fallen, Meadow, Rock, Bridge, Island, Lane.


PART I

Bird song beckons the morning
It's driving me round the bend!
I'm a bear with a sore head
Still a little unstable
After another wild night
 

PART II

When they sounded the retreat
I must have fallen asleep
Just the meadow for a bed
And a rock for a pillow
 

PART III 

Now I have to cross a bridge
Get off this traffic island
And back into the fast lane...
 
 
 
 
 
 

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44 comments:

  1. brenda wJune 30, 2013 at 11:20 AM

    Slow down, you move too fast... Bird song out my windows is the joy of my morning. My husband curses the buggers.

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  2. Stan SkiJune 30, 2013 at 2:30 PM

    Great minds lol... Thanks Brenda :)

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  3. veronicaJune 30, 2013 at 3:15 PM

    Hmm, I can almost taste that one!

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  4. NankaJune 30, 2013 at 3:58 PM

    Oh yes! It is amazing how the mind works and schemes to be off the jamming route, and darned bridges that cause a bottleneck!!

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  5. UnknownJune 30, 2013 at 4:11 PM

    maybe two aspirin will help?

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  6. MiskyJune 30, 2013 at 5:39 PM

    Lovely trilogy of poetry, Stan, and I hope your metaphorical headache sorts itself.

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  7. Dr. Pearl Ketover Prilik (PKP)June 30, 2013 at 7:14 PM

    I hear this as a song! :)

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  8. WabiSabiJune 30, 2013 at 7:48 PM

    Some days are like this! Your poem made me smile! If the headache is more than a metaphor, I hope it clears so you can can enjoy the birds!Tanka Whirl

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  9. Magical Mystical TeacherJune 30, 2013 at 8:01 PM

    A rock for a pillow--you and the biblical Jacob!

    A Weird Quartet

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  10. Sabra BowersJune 30, 2013 at 8:06 PM

    Love Part II. It is a lovely poem on its own. Nice job.

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  11. annell4June 30, 2013 at 9:49 PM

    Sometimes it is just where we must be...in the fast lane. Each piece I really liked!

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  12. AnonymousJune 30, 2013 at 11:16 PM

    Thanks Stan, you always make me smile. That fast lane is a dangerous place, I'd really rather the meadow and rock pillow, but slow is the only speed I know now.

    Elizabeth
    http://soulsmusic.wordpress.com/2013/06/30/wild-gift/

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  13. MarianvJune 30, 2013 at 11:29 PM

    I can almost hear the rush of traffic! Nice comparisons.

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  14. CherylJuly 1, 2013 at 2:49 AM

    I don't know why it's taken me so long to "follow" you. You're a marvelous poet. Today's wordle is no exception. I can totally get behind it.

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  15. flaubertJuly 1, 2013 at 4:15 AM

    I like how you broke this down in 3 parts, Stan. Excellent read. But I must disagree about the birds, I live next door to a family of grackles, and I love hearing and watching them.

    Pamela

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    1. Stan SkiJuly 1, 2013 at 1:21 PM

      Thanks Pamela... so do I... this isn't the 'real' me :)

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  16. MarianneJuly 1, 2013 at 4:30 AM

    Once I am fully awake, I really love the chirping of the birds. What I hate is the clanging construction sounds of an old neighborhood bridge being rebuilt. They start at 6:45 AM.

    Liked what you did with your three part poem.

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  17. Veronica RothJuly 1, 2013 at 6:46 AM

    I have no idea where you live but it sounds like England. Every time I move back over the pond the 4am chorus drives me insane for a week or two. There's just no way to block it out! And, that's without a hangover! :)

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  18. kaykualaJuly 1, 2013 at 7:27 AM

    Now I have to cross a bridge
    Get off this traffic island
    And back into the fast lane...

    That is how life is! A reality to reflect and correct before proceeding further. Great take Stan!

    Hank

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  19. Old EggJuly 1, 2013 at 3:17 PM

    I half expected you to continue and finish with a one liner. I could almost imagine you waking in the morning on a traffic island to the sound of traffic. This piece had great visuals for the mind.

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  20. J Cosmo NewberyJuly 1, 2013 at 6:38 PM

    I really enjoyed teh way you have split this into scenes. It works really well.

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  21. Sharp Little PencilJuly 2, 2013 at 7:18 AM

    Stan, I'm humming "The 50th Street Bridge Song" as I read this. Hope you get to the point when you actually ARE feeling groovy...

    Hangovers are the price we pay for thinking the only good time we can have is with alcohol. I'm not preaching, I'm simply putting it out there. I used to tell my piano bar customers who pestered me for not drinking on the job, "Hey, y'all are drinking to catch up with me. I'm already there!"

    So now it's one brewski a week and no hangovers. The dry heaves give me heebie jeebies!! Amy

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  22. Stan SkiJuly 2, 2013 at 1:42 PM

    Thanks Amy :)

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  23. Sara McNultyJuly 3, 2013 at 12:59 AM

    Hey Stan, This is fun and cleverly written.

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  24. HeidiJuly 9, 2013 at 4:05 PM

    Very cool, Stan, and I like the breaks also.

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