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Brenda at Beyond the Bozone set us a wordle using the following words:
Silver, phrase, scars, inept, forever, message, flattery, perfume, sprouting, crescendo, crude, recounts
Same ironic phrase
Same crude attempt at flattery
This gift of cheap perfume
The same inept apology
He uses every year
Anger taking root
Sprouting dark thoughts
That build to a crescendo
As she recounts the incident…
The cause of those silver scars
Love that last line.ReplyDelete
Thanks Dave; I played about with the order of the lines, and thought it sounded better this way.ReplyDelete
It does. I do hope this isn't auto-biographical! If it is, my illusions are shattered.ReplyDelete
Thanks Viv; No worries Viv, it's pure fiction.ReplyDelete
A little menacing...I like it.ReplyDelete
Thanks I'mnotaverse; Things like this happen...ReplyDelete
Dark, but well-written. I can just see her sitting there, staring at that unopened package. I like that the last two lines just hint - you leave it to our imaginations.ReplyDelete
Thanks Mr.Walker; Not necessarily a sinister cause - just one that she won't forgive...ReplyDelete
Nicely done Stan, you used the words so well!ReplyDelete
Thanks Andy; Some of them were words I'd used before... :)ReplyDelete
Stan, this is so well written, I didn't even notice the wordle words. The last two lines are dark, yet beautiful.ReplyDelete
"As she recounts the incident…
The cause of those silver scars"
I like the poem, how it is written with the short descriptive lines. Got wound up in the images and didn't really look for the wordle words. Very attention getting and effective,ReplyDelete
Pamela; It started as something else, but a few amendments turned it into this.
Elizabeth; I saw the images it provoked and concentrated on them.
This sadly doesn't sound like a very happy anniversary. Excellent imagery in the final lines.ReplyDelete
Great job incorporating all the wordle words in such a compact piece...not forced at all!ReplyDelete
Gloria; I was quite pleased with the outcome.
Whenwordsescape; Compact and fluent was my aim.