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Sunday, February 17, 2013

WHIRL #96

For Sunday Whirl:

OCD



Root of the problem, it seems...
lack of life experience
Hiding behind the locked door
of your mind that made no sense...
Imaginary faces
And visions of naked flesh

Candlelight inadequate
to shed illumination
Images of giving birth
held your imagination
Now reason scurries, escapes
is swept under the carpet...

36 comments:

  1. There is always a way to make it through fear..hiding..sweeping up..seems quite ordered..but who am i to judge!

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  2. Lack of life experience can cause a lot of problems, misunderstandings and miscommunication. Bumbling through is the only way to go...

    Whirling with Gary Soto

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  3. Hiding behind the locked door
    of your mind that made no sense...
    Imaginary faces
    And visions of naked flesh


    ... scary! Great wordle, Stan.

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    1. Since this is my favorite part of the poem, I'll piggyback on to Laurie.

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  4. You are right... it sometimes taks more than candlelight to illuminate!

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  5. Love that reason scurrying under the carpet.... My imagination or are there some nods here to your reading this morning? Or perhaps just lovely synchronicity - either way - a truly terrific poem

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  6. Stan, you caught so much of the source material in your poem. The song is "Carpet Crawlers" by Genesis, Peter Gabriel. Really like what you did, and love that final line,

    Elizabeth
    http://soulsmusic.wordpress.com/2013/02/17/shadow-dance/

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  7. Genesis and PG... makes sense...

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  8. Nice use of the words...opens the door of hidden space....

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  9. Such a creative depiction of OCD. I read it a couple of times and got more each time. Excellently wordled!

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  10. Like you poem, Stan. Like how much you got in with few words. Lots of truth in it, too.

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  11. Oh I always like a good list - the challenge arrives when the muse and your own mind go in different directions.

    Thanks for stopping by my short piece. Spooky how so few words often speak the loudest.

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  12. Reason is a tricky customer to hold down. Dashing around, often leaving you when you need it most.

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  13. Thoughtfully written, Stan.

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  14. Very nice, Stan. The words blend seamlessly which is exactly what they should do, but the message behind the words tells the tale.

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  15. Stan, I see these words didn't really conjure up happiness with you or me. Mine was about a conversation I had with a friend last Thursday, and I was shocked and saddened by what she told me. I guess we never know another's life, do we? Nice compact piece.

    Pamela

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  16. Such an apt description, poetically spoken.

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  17. For some, the absence of reason becomes a way of life. ;)

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  18. ur right, people with OCD do lock themselves behind a door, and won't listen to any reason.

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