For A Wordling World of Sundays
This weeks words are: Aching, train, scribbling, thirst, resilient, sustain, revenge, visions, thrumming, animated, hillsides, whispered
BLACK SHEEP REPRISE
Resilient enough to sustain the pressure
Without upsetting your train of thought
You whispered calmly your good intentions
All the while, aching with thirst for revenge
Meanwhile, my head thrumming, I was having visions
Of you scribbling animated scenes
Of hillsides draped in death and destruction
... Like the ones you sketched when you were younger...
Concise, and yes, a wee bit dark, Stan. Think I've known a few like that, unfortunately.ReplyDelete
Good to see you over at the site!
Thanks Pamela; So have I - but only a few.ReplyDelete
Desiring revenge changes people. That last stanza personalizes the piece for readers. It made a picture of someone I once knew rise in my head (shudder). Glad you're on board.ReplyDelete
Stan, glad to see you here. And really like the concise and edgy story you created with the words. Last line holds memories for me as well,ReplyDelete
The voice of a friend and a careful observer.ReplyDelete
"thirst for revenge" found its way into my wordle, as well...ReplyDelete
Liked your use of all the words. Good job!
Brenda; Good to be here.
Elizabeth; Evetone knows someone like this...
Sandy; Some people have to be watched closely.
Paula; I like to make it as brief as possible.
Mad Kane; Thank you.
Ha - I like those "animated scenesReplyDelete
Of hillsides draped in death and destruction" - I could have painted them, too. I used to be very often into revenge :-)
Thanks Mariya; I think we've all tasted its sweet flavour at some time.ReplyDelete
That's an ominous last line.ReplyDelete
nice contrasts =)ReplyDelete
Excellent use of the wordle words, Stan! So many ways to plot revenge!ReplyDelete
Great use of the words, Stan!ReplyDelete
I'mnotaverse; His name could be... Damien...
Lucychili; Nicee set of words.
Mary; Aren't there just...?
Marianne; They worked quite well for me.
Stan, concise and powerful. This reminded me of a former student or two, who drew pictures as you describe in the second stanza. We hope for resilience and better intentions.ReplyDelete
Thanks Mr. Walker; There's a lot of it about...ReplyDelete
Thanks Lunawitch; Visit appreciated.ReplyDelete
There's so much this doesn't tell us that the possibilities are endless - my sort of poem (one of them!).ReplyDelete
Thanks Dave; Glad you like it.ReplyDelete
This one is frightening. Revenge, I think, is rarely sweet. Powerful poem.ReplyDelete
Thanks Viv; The words took me to the dark side.ReplyDelete
Concise and yet powerful!ReplyDelete
Thanks Mad Kane; I like to keep them as short as possible.ReplyDelete