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Tuesday, February 10, 2009

Love and Eternity

TOP
MAD KANE
MONDAY POETRY TRAIN REVISITED
For TOP - Aubade
FOREVER AGO

A
lonely
man must wait

At last she comes

Claims her love will last
for ever … never fade

Dreaded vote of confidence
precedes her planned intention

Terms, conditions, warnings, threats
In place of passion – tension
accusations, denials
questionable endeavour

She leaves as dawn announces
the first day of forever

Alone again so soon
a man considers

How rapidly

‘Forever’
becomes
a

distant memory

For Mad Kane's Haiku and Limerick
A CURE FOR LOVE?

When Doctor Love came to town
To cure the ‘stood up’, ‘let down’
He hired a stadium
And The Palladium
Such was his world renown

The tickets were sold out; gone
No seats for the love-sick; none
Intended for only
The sad and the lonely
It turns out that’s everyone

For Monday Poetry Train Revisited
ETERNAL

I wouldn’t want eternal life
A hundred years would do for me
I couldn’t take the stress, the strife
Of living for eternity

Loss of my hair, teeth, faculties
Would make me wish for death’s dark door
I couldn’t cope without all these
An OAP for evermore

I’d try to end it with a knife
Unless I could be shown the proof
That, given with eternal life
The promise of eternal youth

20 comments:

  1. Hi Stan, ambitious post, think I like the Limericks best but words of wisdom scattered everywhere and the last three lines of Eternal speak volumes to me.

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  2. I enjoyed all three of these...the second one had a great rhythm to it!

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  3. you are so clever stan.. that middle verse in the first one is excellent... well all of it is but that one made me read it twice!!

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  4. Thanks to:
    Mad Kane; Perhaps Dr. Love is St Valentine.
    Andy; They're starting to mean a lot more to me these days.
    Fledgling Poet; They follow the same kinf of theme and seemed appropriate to the varios prompts.
    Paisley; I guess it's a process that everyone's been through, and if it sounds a bit cynical, that's just the effect the process has - for a while at least.

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  5. The third poem is a concept I've found oddly wearying sometimes, even from young childhood. The idea of life never, ever ending makes me tired when I'm physically and mentally worn out. But I figure it will all sort itself out once I do get to the other side.

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  6. Thanks Julia; I think it's a case of, 'I don't want everything - just a little bit of everything.'

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  7. A great variation of styles there. Enjoyed them all.

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  8. i really like the first one. nothing seems as forever these days.. but lucky ones few and far between.

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  9. I liked all three but enjoyed the first one the most.

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  10. Where would we be without the backbone of cynical to see us through what sometimes feels an eternity of forevers? Good stuff here!

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  11. I like the way you shape your poems on the page. A cynic among us! Who would have thought!

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  12. Thanks to:
    Anthony North; Nothing is forever, however much we want it.
    Gautami Tripathy; Pro's & cons of love & eternity.
    Floreta; Forever can become never in a heartbeat.
    Ofira Sephiroth; Of course there are two sides to this (and every) story.
    Tumblewords; we have to react first before an assessment can be made.
    Granny Smith; Are cynics allowed to look back and laugh?

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  13. Very very nice. Enjoyed reading all three.

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  14. Thanks Jeeves; forever is all around us, but never seems to stay.

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  15. I've with you on eternal life. There are far too many people not enjoying the latter part of their lives.

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  16. Thanks Watermaid; Perhaps they're the ones that chose eternity, and are now regretting it.

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  17. loved all the line shere .. but the limerick was just so cutely done !!

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  18. Thanks Pretty Me; If only it wasn't so true.

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