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Sunday, February 17, 2013

WHIRL #96

For Sunday Whirl:

OCD



Root of the problem, it seems...
lack of life experience
Hiding behind the locked door
of your mind that made no sense...
Imaginary faces
And visions of naked flesh

Candlelight inadequate
to shed illumination
Images of giving birth
held your imagination
Now reason scurries, escapes
is swept under the carpet...
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36 comments:

  1. Jae RoseFebruary 17, 2013 at 6:44 PM

    There is always a way to make it through fear..hiding..sweeping up..seems quite ordered..but who am i to judge!

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  2. Magical Mystical TeacherFebruary 17, 2013 at 8:15 PM

    Lack of life experience can cause a lot of problems, misunderstandings and miscommunication. Bumbling through is the only way to go...

    Whirling with Gary Soto

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  3. Laurie KolpFebruary 17, 2013 at 8:45 PM

    Hiding behind the locked door
    of your mind that made no sense...
    Imaginary faces
    And visions of naked flesh


    ... scary! Great wordle, Stan.

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    1. Sara McNultyFebruary 27, 2013 at 11:28 AM

      Since this is my favorite part of the poem, I'll piggyback on to Laurie.

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  4. Stan SkiFebruary 17, 2013 at 9:54 PM

    Not scary for me ;)

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  5. nanFebruary 17, 2013 at 10:14 PM

    You are right... it sometimes taks more than candlelight to illuminate!

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  6. Dr. Pearl Ketover Prilik (PKP)February 17, 2013 at 10:19 PM

    Love that reason scurrying under the carpet.... My imagination or are there some nods here to your reading this morning? Or perhaps just lovely synchronicity - either way - a truly terrific poem

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  7. AnonymousFebruary 18, 2013 at 12:38 AM

    Stan, you caught so much of the source material in your poem. The song is "Carpet Crawlers" by Genesis, Peter Gabriel. Really like what you did, and love that final line,

    Elizabeth
    http://soulsmusic.wordpress.com/2013/02/17/shadow-dance/

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  8. Stan SkiFebruary 18, 2013 at 1:16 AM

    Genesis and PG... makes sense...

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  9. annell4February 18, 2013 at 1:22 AM

    Nice use of the words...opens the door of hidden space....

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  10. PeggyFebruary 18, 2013 at 2:04 AM

    Such a creative depiction of OCD. I read it a couple of times and got more each time. Excellently wordled!

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  11. AnonymousFebruary 18, 2013 at 2:52 AM

    Like you poem, Stan. Like how much you got in with few words. Lots of truth in it, too.

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  12. JulesFebruary 18, 2013 at 4:28 AM

    Oh I always like a good list - the challenge arrives when the muse and your own mind go in different directions.

    Thanks for stopping by my short piece. Spooky how so few words often speak the loudest.

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  13. Old EggFebruary 18, 2013 at 7:04 AM

    Reason is a tricky customer to hold down. Dashing around, often leaving you when you need it most.

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  14. GoddessChhaviFebruary 18, 2013 at 3:01 PM

    This really hits home.

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  15. AnonymousFebruary 18, 2013 at 9:19 PM

    Thoughtfully written, Stan.

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  16. AnonymousFebruary 18, 2013 at 11:09 PM

    Very nice, Stan. The words blend seamlessly which is exactly what they should do, but the message behind the words tells the tale.

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  17. flaubertFebruary 19, 2013 at 3:09 AM

    Stan, I see these words didn't really conjure up happiness with you or me. Mine was about a conversation I had with a friend last Thursday, and I was shocked and saddened by what she told me. I guess we never know another's life, do we? Nice compact piece.

    Pamela

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  18. ZouxzouxFebruary 19, 2013 at 3:16 AM

    Such an apt description, poetically spoken.

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  19. brenda wFebruary 19, 2013 at 5:54 AM

    For some, the absence of reason becomes a way of life. ;)

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  20. AnonymousFebruary 25, 2013 at 5:20 AM

    ur right, people with OCD do lock themselves behind a door, and won't listen to any reason.

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