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Saturday, August 14, 2010

INCEPTION

For Writers Island prompt #16 2010
And for One Single Impression - Beginning
And Monday Poetry Train Revisited


I CAME HERE TO WILL YOU

Before the beginning – a mind
Exists in the ferment formed
By the dust of the first Big Bang

Creativity is created
And concepts inhabit the mind
Original concepts all

This mind, alone in the void
At some point before Space and Time
Devoid of fear of theft of thought

Inexperienced in matters of matter
Prone to the occasional mistake

In the beginning, a need
A need for survival
For continuity

Ambition, achievement
…things of the future

Life is in the early stages
Of evolving intelligence

Revolving around the light
The light the mind has seen

Mind over matter; actions occur
As fast as the speed of thought

No need to plan ahead
In subconscious reality

No process, no control
Only cause and effect

Without consequence
Or accountability
Until several Big Bangs later…

A story for another Time…
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30 comments:

  1. JinksyAugust 14, 2010 at 2:47 PM

    Thinks:- Is it better to go out with a bang or a wimper?

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  2. anthonynorthAugust 14, 2010 at 3:01 PM

    Now that was clever. Nice one.

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  3. Stan SkiAugust 14, 2010 at 3:14 PM

    Thanks to:
    Jinksy; You decide... strat as you men to go on...
    Anthony; I picked up a couple of themes/phrases from the film and worked around them.

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  4. AnonymousAugust 14, 2010 at 6:01 PM

    That was quick! From inception to creation in a very short time. Nicely done, Stan.

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  5. Stan SkiAugust 14, 2010 at 8:56 PM

    Thanks TLH; Maybe I used subconscious reality to produce it...

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  6. gautami tripathyAugust 14, 2010 at 11:03 PM

    You created well..

    red sand

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  7. flaubertAugust 15, 2010 at 12:51 AM

    Stan a very well-crafted poem for this prompt!
    Pamela

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  8. Diane TAugust 15, 2010 at 1:00 AM

    This movie came out less than a month ago. Obviously you've seen it. I haven't. Funny that with both came out with the Big Bang theory. I liked your poem very much!

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  9. AnonymousAugust 15, 2010 at 2:06 AM

    A very clever and thought-provoking poem. Thanks Stanski.

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  10. ElizabethAugust 15, 2010 at 2:36 AM

    When I thought, this morning, about beginnings, I thought of God, sitting in an eternal black void, waiting for inspiration. Chased the thought away as too much to handle. Damned glad you caught it, Big Bang of a job well done.

    Elizabeth

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  11. Stan SkiAugust 15, 2010 at 8:19 AM

    Thanks to:
    Gautami; A freewrite exercise that developed quite quickly.
    Pamela; I started thinking how our actions have consequences, but we can let our thoughts go out of control without consequences.
    Diane; I used references to the film and added some of my own thoughts.
    ViV; Thought proviking prompts often produce thought provoking responses.
    Elizabeth; I just thought of creation taking a few attempts, or as a thought that took a few re-thinks.

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  12. RiikaInfinityyAugust 15, 2010 at 10:01 AM

    Life is in the early stages
    Of evolving intelligence

    Revolving around the light
    The light the mind has seen

    Truly beautiful and wonderful:D Great take on the prompt, I love these lines especially=D

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  13. Stan SkiAugust 15, 2010 at 10:44 AM

    Thanks Riika; Let's hope that one day the eyes will see it too...

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  14. Dina SpiceAugust 15, 2010 at 11:46 AM

    I haven't seen the movie, but on the note of movies...your poem read to me in the voice that used to introduce movie previews (the guy's name is escaping me right now)....great big feel to your words, I guess, eh?

    - Dina

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  15. Stan SkiAugust 15, 2010 at 12:17 PM

    Thanks Dina; Not intentional, but now you mention it...

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  16. WeaselAugust 15, 2010 at 7:46 PM

    Wonderfully written! A clever response to the prompt!

    -Weasel

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  17. brenda wAugust 15, 2010 at 8:31 PM

    Life is in the early stage of evolving intelligence....that line gives me hope. Then, I love how you use revolving in the next line. Bravo!
    ~Brenda

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  18. Stan SkiAugust 15, 2010 at 11:05 PM

    Thanks to:
    Weasel; clever prompt - got us thinking.
    Brenda; The process runs its course because what can be known, can be taught/learnt.

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  19. Ron.August 16, 2010 at 4:25 PM

    'several big bangs later...' I love it.

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  20. Ramesh SoodAugust 16, 2010 at 9:34 PM

    Stan Ski.. I am happy to be here.. reading the lines..

    This mind, alone in the void
    At some point before Space and Time
    Devoid of fear of theft of thought

    I felt the force of big bang.. wow ! loved it dear..

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  21. Julie Jordan ScottAugust 17, 2010 at 2:50 AM

    Hmmmm. This one is definitely a Thinker Poem. Did I mention I love poems like that? Exceptional.

    THANK YOU!

    A-ha Birth. (My Poem of this week.)

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  22. Stan SkiAugust 17, 2010 at 9:20 AM

    Thans to
    Ron; If at first you don't succeed...
    Ramesh; May the force be with you.
    Julie; Glad it got you thinking.

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  23. Wayne PitchkoAugust 18, 2010 at 5:02 AM

    nicely done Stanski..enjoyed the read

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  24. Stan SkiAugust 18, 2010 at 6:17 AM

    Thanks Wayne; Appreciate the comment.

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  25. SandyCarlsonAugust 18, 2010 at 9:45 AM

    You challenge my understanding of time and need. This is great.

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  26. Stan SkiAugust 18, 2010 at 10:02 AM

    Thanks Sandy; Times change and needs do too - both can be viewed from alternative perspectives.

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  27. Happy FlowerAugust 19, 2010 at 8:59 PM

    Like the brevity of the stanzas for creation discussions can become quite dense, deeply embedded. The title intrigues for speaker states I came here to will You yet find all is impossible to direct/control in a cycling of events. Enjoyed this poem thank-you.

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  28. Stan SkiAugust 19, 2010 at 10:50 PM

    Thanks Happy Flower; Intention and outcome always depend on circumstance...

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  29. Andy SewinaAugust 21, 2010 at 7:22 AM

    Phew, those big bangs frighten me, but I do like the bit about subconscious reality!

    Keep me updated with your plans for October, the girl next door is interested too!

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  30. Stan SkiAugust 21, 2010 at 7:34 AM

    Thanks Andy; I'll let you you know when I get things sorted. Just taking it easy for now.

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