Originally posted for -Top Symbolic
Revived for - Sunday Scribblings Scandalous
COUNTDOWN
Light Years ago, at ten, it commenced.
We sensed a wave of optimism;
rode the rapids at nine; relished
the prosperity. Nobody could
have predicted the severity
of the decline beginning at eight.
We hate the memories it evokes.
We lost all track of time at seven,
but the countdown clock was still ticking,
stubbornly sticking to its schedule
Dark Ages ago, at six…or five,
barely alive, it began – to gnaw
at our bones, asking for direction
Voices we listened to, gave advice,
forced us to face difficult choices.
Four…three…two…it was all but finished.
Diminished responsibility?
A lack of hands-on experience?
We feel it was inevitable.
The final digit; one. No appeal.
Zero; times up. All things; happy, sad,
good or bad, must come at last, to rest.
Our once, twenty-twenty clairvoyance,
and all those blessings we counted,
amounted to mockery; bluffing,
and we got our just deserts…nothing
amazing
ReplyDeletewhew! powerful words!
ReplyDeleteAwesome
ReplyDeleteYeah, you know what they say? They say there's no such thing as a free lunch!
ReplyDeleteHappy Birthday Stan!
Thanks once more;
ReplyDeleteyours truly mason; Just spotted your comment - cheers
texasblu; promise, potential - it can all turn to dust - usually due to our own attitudes
ofira sephiroth; thank you
sweettalkingguy; everyone knows that, but still they try for it. starter - arrogance: main course - dissapointment; (just) desert - nothing
Wonderful post!
ReplyDeleteBelated Happy Birthday, Stan!
Who is doling out free lunch?
tunneled view
gautami tripathy; Thanks for the thought, as well as the comment. Unfortunately the free food's finished - even so, someone had to pay for it.
ReplyDeleteThis makes you think. Nice! BJ
ReplyDeleteI dig the first person plural narration, the wild ride of these pilgrims' (no question they are us) follies. A nice careening.
ReplyDeleteThanks to:
ReplyDeleteB. Roan; If only we'd seen it coming!
Murat11; The way a lot of things start and end.
Another excellent, enlightening piece.
ReplyDeleteThanks Anthony; Hindsight is often the only way we get to see things clearly.
ReplyDeleteLove the narration!
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This is great, and so original. Terrific piece.
ReplyDeleteI like the countdown idea! Different!
ReplyDeletemost interesting perspective, to be sure!!!
ReplyDeleteThanks to:
ReplyDeleteGautami Tripathy; Joy-ride's over...for now - waiting for the next wave.
Keithsramblings; And it applies to so many situations.
Linda Jacobs; Looking back on any scenario, we see the milestones that we ignored first time round.
Danni; Climax - anti-climax; we need the high's, but are rarely prepared for the low's.
Oh, what we would have given for some foresight.
ReplyDeleteThis was very well done. Glad you revived it.
very deep.. extremely well written,, and i don't think there is one among us that cannot relate on some level.... excellent write....
ReplyDeleteHi Stan, this has certainly not lost anything since the previous outing.
ReplyDeleteApologies for leaving it late to respond to your comments.
ReplyDeleteThanks to:
Patois; Hey; I wish I'd known how appropriate a warning it would turn out to be.
Paisley; It seemed appropriate to dig it up at this time, and yes we've all experienced the fall that follows the pride.
Andy;It may have even gained a more pertinent meaning.