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Wednesday, May 4, 2011

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INTO MY MIND

I’m going
Into my head
To see if it’s true
What they said about
No bread and half a loaf
Both not the full shilling
But the thing that’s nearly
Killing me
The thing I’m
Really dying to know
Trying to be
Oh so sure of
And not just so by the law of
Averages
Is this:

What exactly is the score?

Now
I’m not the sharpest tool
But I’m not a fool
Or am I?
Can I be less
Serious?
Clearly this is more the case:
No empty space between your ears
May not be
All that it appears
A full loaf only half baked
Make no mistake
Believe you me
Is gonna be
Most detri…
…Mental…!

So you see it’s not true
What they said…

…Now I’m going
Out of my head

OUT OF MY MIND…

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26 comments:

  1. MaryMay 4, 2011 at 5:06 PM

    This poem really had me coming and going, Stan!

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  2. AnonymousMay 4, 2011 at 5:13 PM

    Poor Stan. They say it's worse if you know it's happening. :)

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  3. Stan SkiMay 4, 2011 at 5:23 PM

    Thanks to:
    Mary; Thera's a limit to everything... or is there...?
    I'mnotaverse; Dunno... I wasn't even there... :)

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  4. lucychiliMay 4, 2011 at 5:53 PM

    mm so long as it is
    the same inside and out?
    or is that not how people are?

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  5. Stan SkiMay 4, 2011 at 6:09 PM

    Thanks Lucychili; I've only ever been inside my own... :)

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  6. brenda wMay 4, 2011 at 6:49 PM

    Ha! I like your play on detri
    mental.

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  7. ireneMay 4, 2011 at 7:00 PM

    Very playful Stan! Go!

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  8. AmandaMay 4, 2011 at 7:09 PM

    It sounds grungie. Like something Nirvana might sing. I like it. :)

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  9. Stan SkiMay 4, 2011 at 7:38 PM

    Thanks to:
    Brenda; That's the way it drove me :)
    Irene; Yeah, playful, but it left me with a sore head... :)
    Amanda; Maybe I should set it to music...

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  10. ElizabethMay 4, 2011 at 9:04 PM

    If you ever figure it out, Stan, would you please let me know? I'd really appreciate that.

    Elizabeth

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  11. Stan SkiMay 4, 2011 at 9:29 PM

    Thanks Elizabeth; I'll keep you posted!

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  12. barbaraMay 4, 2011 at 11:38 PM

    love it.

    Do you know this:
    http://funny-poems.edigg.com/Parody/THE_MODERN_HIAWATHA.shtml

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  13. Stan SkiMay 4, 2011 at 11:49 PM

    Thanks Barbara; Much appreciated

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  14. flaubertMay 5, 2011 at 12:01 AM

    Stan, they say the true crazies are the last to know. Fun use of detrimental.

    Pamela

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  15. Stan SkiMay 5, 2011 at 12:05 AM

    Thanks Pamela; Oh dear... I guess that means I'll never know...

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  16. Donald HarbourMay 5, 2011 at 12:15 AM

    Okay Stan lay off the vine shake and Mekong Whiskey. It is a dangerous journey for one to enter their own mind. It is an aporia travail. However, you did pop out the other side of,
    er a.....sanity. I enjoyed the trip with you.
    Regards,
    Don

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  17. Stan SkiMay 5, 2011 at 1:56 AM

    Thanks Donald; A journey into my mind is only ever going to be a short one... :)

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  18. AnonymousMay 5, 2011 at 2:15 AM

    You never fail to surprise me, Stan, as well as make me laugh. This poem does both.

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  19. Stan SkiMay 5, 2011 at 3:28 AM

    Thanks Viv; More surprises and more laughs to come... at least that's the plan :)

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  20. Andy SewinaMay 5, 2011 at 5:47 AM

    Very nicely written!!!

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  21. Mr. WalkerMay 5, 2011 at 8:39 AM

    I'm right there with you, Stan. I'm sure I'm not in my right mind. I like how your poems are fun, but make me think.

    Richard

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  22. Stan SkiMay 5, 2011 at 2:09 PM

    Thanks to:
    Andy; I had to think about it...
    Mr.Walker; I like to take things seriously... but not too seriously.

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  23. AnonymousMay 7, 2011 at 1:27 PM

    Hey, Stan (and Mr. W.), at least I have a diagnosis, ha ha ha. This was very cool, free-form and quirky. Loved it! Amy
    (and the diagnosis is bipolar with a little touch of PTSD for kicks.)
    http://sharplittlepencil.wordpress.com/2011/05/07/powerful-urge/

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  24. Stan SkiMay 7, 2011 at 7:24 PM

    Thanks Amy;

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  25. AnonymousMay 16, 2011 at 5:01 PM

    Really enjoyed this at Animal Writes yesterday Stan. A great piece.

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  26. Madeleine Begun KaneMay 19, 2011 at 1:44 PM

    I enjoyed it!

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