Thoughts on getting old(er), including TOP prompt - Triolet
TRIOLET – TIME
I’m thinking about Time
And how it takes its toll
On our bodies and minds
I’m thinking…about time
I started to prepare
For when Time is no more
I’m thinking. About time!
Better late than never
DENIAL
Do I really remember the Sixties?
Seventies? As well as Eighties, Nineties
Or is it only imagination?
Events just my playful, youthful mind sees?
Do I really remember The Beatles?
Monochrome TV and the days before
DVD, Internet, or Mobile Phone
There’s just NO WAY I can be forty four!
I refuse to believe I’m so ancient
Therefore those memories of times gone by
Mere visions of a fictional era
As seen through the gleam in my father’s eye.
NO FUTURE
The future ended a long, long time ago
How do I know…? I was there!
But guess what? You were also there, beside me
It was more than I could bear
Right now, in this stationary, timeless void
It’s always late November
Endless winter – mocking spring’s broken promise
Taunting us to remember
Now, there’s only the past to look forward to
Ah! The past!…Oh! I can’t wait!
A time of promise and great expectation
A time to anticipate
We will have cause to predict prosperity
We will always get it right
We will think of our other, before our self
Why should we have cause to fight?
All those careful plans, we’ll make for tomorrow
We will feast upon the crumbs!
…Asphyxiated by irony…we’ll know
Why tomorrow never comes.
Your triolet really made me laugh. Excellent change in punctuation in your repeated line to change the meaning.
ReplyDeleteThe Triolet was clever. I liked that.
ReplyDeleteThat was one good triolet.
ReplyDeleteI liked the other two verses too, especially denial...
Thanks for visiting Stan.
ReplyDeleteI really like how you explore the different aspects of time in your poems.
Gratitude to:
ReplyDeletecrafty green poet; I thought i'd blown it on the last line. Just in case - "It takes its toll...and how!" may or may not make it work better.
anthonynorth; It was my first attempt and I wasn't sure.
gautami tripathy; I thought I could justify posting them together as they follow a theme.
brian; Less than a week after my 44th birthday, it was more a pre-occupation than an exploration. I just wrote what I was thinking.
I like your twists about time.
ReplyDeleteThe three of these poems were great fun... and I remember the sixties, and the Beatles -- I think!? ;)
ReplyDeleteVery clever triolet - and oh so true for many of us, especially me!
ReplyDeleteLove the poem on living in the future - very mystical and thought provoking. It's always Late November . . . Reminded me how my grandma must have felt when she was 105 years old - knowing everthing - been there, done that was her favorite saying.
Thanks so much for sharing - I really like your style of writing based on these two poems . . . I shall go to read some more . .
Peace, Light and Love, CordieB.
Yes - I do remember the monochrome tv, the beatles, even the rabbit ears - I'm 44 too - but I also remember being a girl and thinking I could remember the 40's 50's and early sixties, just like I was there - it was through my parent's eyes, and that monochrome tv. This one brought back some really fond memories - and reminded me of how many of our memories are not really ours, but those of the people we are close to. Very creative, indeed. Thanks for creating it!
ReplyDeleteYes - I do remember the monochrome tv, the beatles, even the rabbit ears - I'm 44 too - but I also remember being a girl and thinking I could remember the 40's 50's and early sixties, just like I was there - it was through my parent's eyes, and that monochrome tv. This one brought back some really fond memories - and reminded me of how many of our memories are not really ours, but those of the people we are close to. Very creative, indeed. Thanks for creating it!
ReplyDeletesuperb, i enjoyed this much. Esp, that last one ...and "Why tomorrow never comes" thanks for bringing me here.
ReplyDeleteTime is always a sort of serious thing to me and then you made me laugh at the end.
ReplyDeleteClever and nicely written.
ReplyDeleteTime has a habit of twisting perspectives, and your poem reflects that well!
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Thanks for your thoughtful comments:
ReplyDeletemy backyard; time is so familiar, yet so mysterious.
rob kistner; Memories don't really fade, even the good ones sometimes scare us into realising how old we are - not that I'm OLD, or anything!
cordieb; Glad you enjoyed them and bthry brought back happy times for you - 105? Now I realise I'm only a youngster, after all.
ul; We always plam ahead, but plans and reality can be quite seperate.
annie; always good to be able to look back, even at unhappy times, with a smile.
ofira sephiroth; Just some of the things that were playing on my mind - I wouldn't change any of it though.
Gemma; Our attitudes determine the amount of twist.
I really liked those, and thought your triolet was especially clever.
ReplyDeleteHa! We must be stuck in the same place - "I refuse to believe I’m so ancient". I still feel twenty, honest!
ReplyDeleteNifty trio of poems. Nice job!
They say that if you remember the 60's you weren't there! But I was and I do - and I have a Beatles concert programme to prove it!!A really great post.
ReplyDeleteYour triolet made me chuckle!
ReplyDeleteFurther thanks to:
ReplyDeletemad kane; I really didn't know what a triolet was before this prompt.
constance; how I feel, how I look, and what I remember, all tell me something different about my age - and they all keep changing.
keith hillman; I'm probably (only slightly) too young to have been involved with anything that might cause me to 'forget' the time.
linda jacobs; It's very satisfying to know that I was able to bring smiles to faces.
A fun read and many truths therein. Well done Stan, glad I stopped in. thanks for visiting my blog too.
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i could so relate to each and every word.. much of this being the ground work for my piece today thirty years... all of the wonder is past it seems and the remainder,, well... i just don't feel the same exuberance i did entering into the other portions of life...
ReplyDeleteThank you:
ReplyDeletegeraldine; You're welcome and I'll look out for your posts.
paisley; I hear you. For me it's a case of holding close what you know won't let you down